I'm missing something. What's hard to follow here? I mean, it's not Hemingway, but the previous paragraphs describe the difficulty of the situation, in which Theranos -- according to the WSJ -- asked its employees to recant their statements to the WSJ (pre-publication).
In the part that you excerpt, the WSJ reports the nurse saying that the company failed to produce data that would prove the accuracy of the test. The company (Ms. King) says that it did produce the data.
...How would you word that and the surrounding paragraphs?
I didn't say the subject was bad, I said the writing sucked.
The excerpt I quoted was isolated like a paragraph, but I don't remember a paragraph being 2 poorly written sentences.
How would I have worded it? For one I would have presented one side of the entire story, and then an opposing view-point (i.e. the view point of Theranos execs), instead of "person a said x. person y said x'".
I guess I'm sorry I'd prefer writing hidden behind a pay wall to be a little more elegant than what an 8 year old could write.
In the part that you excerpt, the WSJ reports the nurse saying that the company failed to produce data that would prove the accuracy of the test. The company (Ms. King) says that it did produce the data.
...How would you word that and the surrounding paragraphs?