Side note: Did anyone else find the writing for this article absolutely horrendous?
“They were never able to produce them,” she says.
Ms. King says the company did show detailed
testing-accuracy data to the nurse.
I would have flunked freshman-english if I wrote papers like this. There was zero effort to link thoughts together all-throughout the piece. I thought the point of a pay-wall was to promote and support good content?
I'm missing something. What's hard to follow here? I mean, it's not Hemingway, but the previous paragraphs describe the difficulty of the situation, in which Theranos -- according to the WSJ -- asked its employees to recant their statements to the WSJ (pre-publication).
In the part that you excerpt, the WSJ reports the nurse saying that the company failed to produce data that would prove the accuracy of the test. The company (Ms. King) says that it did produce the data.
...How would you word that and the surrounding paragraphs?
I didn't say the subject was bad, I said the writing sucked.
The excerpt I quoted was isolated like a paragraph, but I don't remember a paragraph being 2 poorly written sentences.
How would I have worded it? For one I would have presented one side of the entire story, and then an opposing view-point (i.e. the view point of Theranos execs), instead of "person a said x. person y said x'".
I guess I'm sorry I'd prefer writing hidden behind a pay wall to be a little more elegant than what an 8 year old could write.
Uh, I understood what they were trying to say, I'm stating that they were shitty at actually saying it.
If someone expects me to shell out a subscription for their articles, the absolute least they should do is make sure the writing is above a 5th grade level.
