Unnecessary detail.
> how to get my articles to stay at a low reading angle
I don't know what this even means. What's a "low reading angle"?
> instead of getting flung back in my face by an impatient editor
This is factually incorrect. The author was the editor, and the person doing the flinging was the founder.
> the experience was invaluable
I'm not a fan of just blunting telling the reader "you should care about this".
> it's time I shared how to write a good opening paragraph
Redundant. The title of the article is "How to Write an Opening Sentence".
I really don't think what you have here is an improvement.
Unnecessary detail.
> how to get my articles to stay at a low reading angle
I don't know what this even means. What's a "low reading angle"?
> instead of getting flung back in my face by an impatient editor
This is factually incorrect. The author was the editor, and the person doing the flinging was the founder.
> the experience was invaluable
I'm not a fan of just blunting telling the reader "you should care about this".
> it's time I shared how to write a good opening paragraph
Redundant. The title of the article is "How to Write an Opening Sentence".
I really don't think what you have here is an improvement.