Good post. I have a particular style from having Strunk and White shoved into my brain, that I prefer, so you can throw this comment away if you want.
But if you'd like feedback, I'd suggest brutally editing down the text to be more direct and concise. You can certainly write long form, but after a few minutes it started to pile on ancillary and anecdotal paragraphs and I lost the main thread pretty quick. Add to that a random picture with an inception reference and it's starting to feel less like an informative piece and was collecting random unrelated content.
Think about what you're trying to say, say it, then go back and make sure you said it and only that. Everything else is just practice typing, not writing.
Maybe you have 3 or 4 things to say, but just say them.
But if you'd like feedback, I'd suggest brutally editing down the text to be more direct and concise. You can certainly write long form, but after a few minutes it started to pile on ancillary and anecdotal paragraphs and I lost the main thread pretty quick. Add to that a random picture with an inception reference and it's starting to feel less like an informative piece and was collecting random unrelated content.
Think about what you're trying to say, say it, then go back and make sure you said it and only that. Everything else is just practice typing, not writing.
Maybe you have 3 or 4 things to say, but just say them.