Oh I agree with you 100%, it's just that this copy has gone through various iterations, and you need to step back once in a while and read all of it to see if it blends together well, which I haven't done in a while.
I, too, dislike people who try to be funny by cursing, because it feels facile. I just read the copy again now and there were a few cases where the cursing felt gratuitous, rather than for a specific effect, so I have changed those.
I, too, dislike people who try to be funny by cursing, because it feels facile. I just read the copy again now and there were a few cases where the cursing felt gratuitous, rather than for a specific effect, so I have changed those.